I talked today with a few people who have finished or nearly finished reading Betrovia. Hopefully one of more of these wonderful friends will "belly up" and write a nifty review!
Anyway, one of those people said that I should have had more "suitors" for Galena. I laughed and said that it never entered my mind to do anything with Galena's "love life" than I already did. But might there more to happen with her relationally in Part 2? Could be...
And here's an idea for Part 2 from the outline:
As
Kristof sleeps in Lycentia the first night there, he dreams of the
Haarigoian warlord/officer that led the attack on Noran (chp. 14).
His dream includes: the officer returns to his home in the Plains
seacoast area after the attack on Noran; just expo—as a dream
sequence should be—so setting but no dialogue, include how by
himself he treats his leg wound, include the addition of a
Knaesin-steel sword to his collection of more than a few Lycentian
memorabilia; Kristof awakens from his sleep/dream when Dalten smacks
him for being too noisy.
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